Megan Galbreth’s conclusion in her “‘Foul Disproportion, Thoughts Unnatural’; An analysis of Othello” had me confused as to which category of the four it could fit into, as it seemed that many her conclusion composed of many elements. However, I have come to an inference, in which I believe that the conclusion written by Galbreth brings in new evidence. This is due to the fact that she introduces two pieces of evidence: “I follow [Othello] to serve my turn upon him” and “I am not what I am”, to strengthen and provide sound proof for her argument in concluding her essay.

Though there is also an element of a ‘return to motive’ within the conclusion, for Galbreth provides proof as to why Americans living at the time of the Shakespearean play may overlook the ‘scheming and egocentric liar, Iago. She states that Americans had chosen to side with Iago due to their resigned detachment to the play as it was written on a concept that was viewed to be against ‘nature’ in that day and age. However the expose fails to focus on the counter-argument, as it is briefly stated in one line, followed by Galbreth’s original argument as to why it was absurd for an individual to side with Iago, as he was the manipulative mind behind Othello killing Desdemona, due to his ‘radical inferiority’, which Americans nowadays do not view as a just concept. Rather, the focus is on the two pieces of evidence as Galbreth centers her final conclusion upon those who excerpts, to wrap up her argument on a high note.

For my essay, rather than introducing new evidence to bring my essay to an end, I’m striving to focus on referring back to my counter-argument. This is as I’ve built up the strength of my essay on the basis of the counter-argument and focused on overturning it. For that reason, I think it’s essential to remind the readers of all the reasons why my standpoint could possibly have been wrong, yet isn’t. I find that this conclusion will establish the flow within my essay, however, it may possibly bring it to appear as if a standard five paragraph essay.

 

-Mahum Cheema